We edited your piece and we're still hung up on the ending. Basically, as readers we need to understand what's special about Beauty Barand why it's different than Union Pool. Noting that people who smoke outside can talk to one another feels limp, as you can do that at any bar. I've attached an edited copy with comments from my editor. Let me know what you think. If you can make editsessentially re-write the last grafand return it by tomorrow afternoon, that'd be ideal. Thanks much,
Paul
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