This is based on the file that I just received "Anonymous Concepts etc djc notes.doc" - August 28th 2011 Section: Figures, Factions, Concepts AnonOps - good Lulzsec - good Topiary - I am really good friends with and do not like the part here: "His unexplained disappearance in late March prompted rumors that he had been detained, although he had in fact told several of us that he planned to go dark for some period; upon reappearing a few weeks later, he was publicly silent as to his absence while privately telling others he had been raided but merely charged with having perpetrated a DDOS attack." I believe that section can work without that part just fine. Doxing - good Backtrace Security - good Sabu - "The most active hacker" should read "One of the most active hackers", there are others that are just as active as him. Kayla - "Backtrace and other sources, including Hoglund himself, now believe Kayla to be a twenty-something New Jersey male named Corey Barnhill." That part is completely uneccessary. This book isnt about actually doxing anons. OpSony - The opening is wrong. The attack on Sony was not about Geohot. Anonymous didnt start attacking until Sony filed with Youtube to get the IP addresses of every single person who watched a Geohot video. And Sony asked Geohot's webhost for the IP of everyone who had ever viewed his website. That is what pissed everyone off, not them going after Geohot. th3j35t3r - good 2600 - good Team Themis - good Persona Management - good Endgame Systems - good Barry Friedman - good Owen - Doesnt read right to me. I would put it more like this: A server admin for the AnonOps IRC network, and one of the 40 U.S. citizens who were raided by the FBI in late January. Although Owen tends not to participate in the operations themselves, his ability to moderate operations channels at will continually put him at the center of drama and, more frequently, farce. Commander X - good Ryan Cleary - "helped run the AnonOps server" should read "helped run the AnonOps IRC network". The network is made up of many servers. "overseeing of an IRC channel" should read "overseeing of an IRC network". ------------------------------------ This is based on the file "Anonymous Proposal July 26.doc" Section: The first section? No name. Paragraph 3, Sentance 2: "Two years after first making its presence felt by way of a multifaceted and globe-spanning campaign against the Church of Scientology, the mysterious online collective known as Anonymous was clearly developing into a significant new player on the world stage." This should actually say Three years. 2008 - 2011. Paragraph 7: ends with an errant "you" after the last period. ------------------------------------ Starting the next section we need to talk a lot. It wasnt just me and a couple friends. I didnt know the people involved really before this. And multiple groups appeared at once with different ideas about what to do. "Three years earlier, a couple of friends and I hit upon a great idea for a troll." is somewhat incorrect. Something like: Three years earlier, a few people noticed the Church of Scientology abusing the DMCA and decided to do something about it. "A woman who had left the Church of Scientology movement had leaked a video clip in which Tom Cruise, the group's preeminent celebrity spokesman, gives one of the most bizarre and rambling addresses one could imagine." From what I know it was a woman, but there is also a man who claims it was him, and neither seem to be able to prove it. I would re-write that as: Someone who had left... In the next paragraph it ends with "So we decided to bring in Anonymous." That should read more like this: At that point people decided to recruit more Anons and other people from around the internet. "Happy with our work, we put up a couple more links on 4chan while also distributing instructions on joining an IRC server we'd set up for those who wished to join us in planning ways by which to get the truth out about how the Church operates. " The IRC Server had already existed, it was named PartyVan IRC. They were allowing people to use their network for this. The part about my girlfriend reads good, but its not exactly correct. I was seeing a girl for a short period right as this started, but she isnt my current girlfriend. She was just a girl I had dated a couple times who knew what was going on. She told me to go home and check it out, but not to "come home" as we didnt live together. So that needs to be edited to be more in line with reality or the current girlfriend might be mad. "We'd been thinking that a couple of protests could be managed, for instance." This is a bit inaccurate. After the video went up and thousands of people showed up on IRC we had no clue what to do with them and sat around brainstorming for hours before someone found a youtube video of an ex scientologist protesting outside of an org (one of their churches.) So this doesnt flow with the timeline completely, it isnt horribly wrong, just a bit out of place in the timeline. At the end of this section it states in the last sentance "And many of them are entirely true." I would prefer it if this was reworded a bit. Something along the lines of: "And while I have not taken part in any of the illegal activities, many of the early accusations are entirely true" The goal with this edit is to make sure we dont implicate me in the illegal activities even slightly. Thoughts? -------------------------------- The next section on hbgary is great. ---------------------------------- In this next section we have this: "I was initially charged with disturbing an assembly of worship, disturbing the peace, and harassment; their lawyers made it known to me that they had the means to keep this in the courts for years even despite the DA dropped the harassment charge." It should actually be: "I was initially charged with disturbing an assembly of worship, criminal trespass, and criminal harassment; their lawyers made it known to me that they had the means to keep this in the courts for years even despite the DA dropped the trespass charge." "I'd spent a good portion of my '20s alluding an FBI cybercrime unit assigned to break up a warez ring" Should read "I'd spent a good portion of my teens and early '20s alluding an FBI cybercrime unit assigned to break up a warez ring" "They never actually caught me, per se; instead I was turned in by a neighbor of mine after he got himself arrested while in possession of several kilos of coke and thus had plenty of reason to cooperate" This cannot be said, it is under seal and is not actually something we can print without me getting a lot of shit. It should say: "They never actually caught me, per se; instead I was turned in by someone looking for an immunity deal after they were busted earlier." "As I was in no particular hurry to repeat the experience or anything similar, I agreed to Scientology's proposal to have the judge issue a continuance," The DA actually offered this up in a discussion with my lawyer, so it should be more like: "As I was in no particular hurry to repeat the experience or anything similar, I agreed to the DA's proposal to have the judge issue a CWOF (Continuance Without Finding),"