me: actually, it's not that bad Robert: well, he's right in the sense that you've done the meta Robert: but you haven't done the "and here is the story of little janey whatsherfuck as she goes through her double life" Robert: we will follow jany on her roller coaster ride etc. me: yeah, that shouldn't be hard Robert: now, there's an argument to be made that you shouldn't do that and i could even be convinced Robert: but i'm easy. a lit agent is hard Robert: because he knows what will sell to a publisher Robert: alright plane is descending, so i am offline ttyl send me that stuff when you have a chance. Robert: also, i LOVE the opening metaphor and i think you can tinker with it a bit and make it even stronger