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From:
Jonathan Farley <lattice.theory@gmail.com>
Date: Sun, Oct 3, 2010 at 4:53 PM
Subject: typos in and comments on the introduction and first three chapters
To: Barrett Brown <
barriticus@gmail.com>
If I were you, I would send your book to Gary Younge of The Guardian, pointing out the chapter that deals with me ("me" meaning me, not you). Have you got back-cover quotes yet?
Also try to contact Michael Eric Dyson through his university. (He keeps moving, so I'm not sure where he is now.) He mentioned me in his book, "Why I Love Black Women." He might be able to promote your book.
Tavis Smiley had me on his radio program twice. I don't know how to reach him, but again, mentioning the chapter with me might be a way to get on his show.
Yale's Glenda Gilmore might be a good person for an academic audience. (She's also won awards for her books.)
Can your agent turn this into a documentary?
p. 4 l.4
"turn" should be "turns"?
I have a law about science fiction: If a science fiction author says something will happen in a particular year, fast forward about 50 years. (I don't expect we'll have flying cars by 2018 as per Bladerunner.)
p.11 l.14
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p.13 l.8
the left quotation mark in front of "by" should be a right quotation mark after "day,"
p.16 l.-13
The long dash between "The" and "collective" should be a space
p.18 middle
My favorites are "Y2K: It May Already Be Too Late," "The Coming Depression of the 1990's," and "2005" (no comment needed).
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Chapter 1
p. 7 l. -10
heh
p.10 l.6
should "cold war" be capitalized?
l. -11 and l. -15
Do you want "America Online" and "America Onduty" in double or single quotes?
p.15 l. -2
"by" should be "by a"
p.16 l.5
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p.17 l. 8
smile
l.-12
heh
p.20 l. -8
smile
p.23 ll. 9-13
Are these still part of the quote? Then the indentation needs to be fixed.
p.26 ll. -5 ff.
What are the dates?
p.30 l. 3
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Chapter 2
p.44 paragraph 1
heh
p.45 l. 19
heh
p.51 l. -12
"began" should be "begun"
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Chapter 3
p. 58 l. -9
"is" should be "it"
p.62 l. -3
should there be a space between "telling" and "Jim"?
p.62 l. --10
late October of what year?
p. 64 l. -10
What does "This" refer to?
p.66 l. -1
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p.67 l. 15
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l. -10
heh
p.70 l.14
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l. -1
heh
p.72 l. 1
Is this Krauthammer?
p.73 l. 2
smile
p.77 l. 4
heh
l.-12
"order" should be "order to"
p.79 l.1
smile
l. -6
heh
p.81 l.15
"as much as" should be "as much of"
p.84 l. -12
Do you want "perimeters" or "parameters"?
p.85 l.2
heh
p. 92 l.-13
smile
p.93 l. 3
"Condoleeza" should be "Condoleezza"
p.94 l. -12
smile
p.112 l. 2
heh
l. -3
" Raine's " should be " Raines' "
p. 122 l. -10
I'd probably pick a different word than "ASHKENAZIC". Right-wing enemies could twist this one too easily.
p.124 l. 2
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p. 125 l. -10
heh