edits
Subject: edits
From: Karen Lancaster <lancaster.karen@gmail.com>
Date: 7/8/10, 13:46
To: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>

Wow, this looks FABULOUS, had forgotten how impressive a piece of work it is, MSTG. Only noticed a couple of things:
 
Page 104
Do you mean "morons" or is this a funny term? Wasn't sure.

Whatta buncha maroons!

Page 228
"Ramna" should be "Ramtha"

that stupid Ramna routine . . . ”

 
Page 231
Shouldn't this be "thereby revealing a beautiful -- albeit mechanical -- female form." It makes you sound like you are making love "well into the night" with a man.

“i’m from the future, lol.” And then he took

off his mask, thereby revealing his mechanical face.

and i’m a robot! beep beep beep!”

The two of us made love well into the night.

Page 234

should be "characterizing him as a racist" and do you want to delete reference to True/Slant since it will be defunct by then? Huffington Post on its own might be more impressive?

I wrote a short article for The Huffington

Post and True/Slant pointing this out, though I refrained from

characterizing him a racist

Page 282

Do you want to re-think including this/maybe replacing it with something else in light of recent events?

Charles Krauthammer presumably

doesn’t remember having been essentially wrong about every

military and foreign policy matter on which he’s opined from

1999 to 2010, as he was back on

Fox News in September of 2009

making his latest already failed prediction:

CHRIS WALLACE: Best guess: Will the president

end up giving McChrystal the troops he wants, or

will he change the war strategy?

CHARLES KRAUTHAMMER : I think he doesn’t

and McChrystal resigns.

The president did, and McChrystal did not.

This nonsense will continue until we ourselves put an end

to it.