Subject: Re: Edits |
From: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> |
Date: 4/5/10, 08:31 |
On Mon, Apr 5, 2010 at 8:19 AM,
<kjlanc@aol.com> wrote:
Just read through today's T/S article. Are you able to edit the content (as opposed to appending comments)? A few things you might want to change.
First paragraph, first sentence:
"... also ten public attention at such time..." Ten? Did you mean a different word, perhaps a verb?
First paragraph. "C/SM"
Should this be C/CM to echo Corrupt/Corrupting Media in same sentence?
First paragraph, last sentence.
"A large problem fundamental to the majority of all others has"
Sentence looks like it was chopped off before completion.
Hope this doesn't come across as critical. Will be interested to see what comes from this. Regards.
Kermit