Subject: Re: video |
From: "Ava K Lamb" <tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com> |
Date: 11/16/09, 13:04 |
To: "Barrett Brown" <barriticus@gmail.com> |
Reply-To: tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com |
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Very good. I'll rewrite it a bit to remove those parts. You are correct about the bushes and broken iron detector; I believe I was on hard drugs at the time and thus my own self-criticism alarm was broken. Will get you revised version later today. Also, maybe Thomas Paine shouldn't even wink at all; could be a little much.
On Mon, Nov 16, 2009 at 12:57 PM, Ava K Lamb <tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com> wrote:Ok.
I'm not sure how to make Thomas pain wink but ill see what I can do
As far as what I think.. About the script, I think its mostly effective. I'm not sure if you want opinions about the script or not but I
I don't like the line about the iron detector bequeathed to his son. Or the part about the dvd recorder instructions. I fint them to be distracting and coming from an "unknown" peanut gallery.
I also feel iffy about going into the saudi monarch stuff.
I feel like embelishing too much about the bushes almost makes the psa seem out dated, I think it should focus on why this is relavant now without focusing on the bushes as a reason why its a problem
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From: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>Date: Mon, 16 Nov 2009 12:36:15 -0500To: Ava K. Lamb<tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com>Subject: Re: videoOne thing - the term "GAMPAC" should be replaced with "Enlighten the Vote," our new name.On Sun, Nov 15, 2009 at 8:35 PM, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:
Okay, she wants to do it. Here's that script I did a while ago. Let me know what you think.
(Comes on screen)
"All persons born or naturalized in the United States, and subject to the jurisdiction thereof, are citizens of the United States and of the State wherein they reside."
(Comes on screen)
14th Amendment to the Constitution of the United States of America
(All disappears, except for word "citizens," which remains and becomes part of next quote)
"No, I don't know that atheists should be considered as citizens, nor should they be considered patriots. This is one nation under God."
George H.W. Bush
Citizen
(All disappears except for "one nation under God," which is used in next portion)
"One nation under God."
Terminology Added to the Pledge of Allegiance in 1954
Carries All the Legal Weight of the Instructions that Came with Your DVD Recorder
(All disappears except for "one nation under God," which returns to Bush quote, which appears again)
"No, I don't know that atheists should be considered as citizens, nor should they be considered patriots. This is one nation under God."
George H.W. Bush
Citizen
(appears next) Confidant to Theocratic Saudi Monarchs
(appears next) Former president of a nation founded in opposition to theocracy and monarchy
(appears next) Proud owner of a broken irony detector
(appears next) ... which he later bequeathed to his son
(all disappears)
GAMPAC
We're old school.
Are you?
(Picture of Thomas Paine appears)
(Paine winks)
(end)
On Sun, Nov 15, 2009 at 12:51 PM, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:
Yeah, it's a Flip. I'm going to buy one for myself as soon as I have some extra funds. It's fucking amazing.
I just e-mailed Johnson to see if she can authorize the payment to you for this script. I'll dig it up out of my docs later today and send it along.On Sun, Nov 15, 2009 at 12:38 PM, Ava K. Lamb <tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com> wrote:Thanks,
I appreciate you taking my advice on that. If you're doing a series then consistency is important and it is seriously frustrating to not see peoples faces. When you cant even see who's getting slapped, the slapping lacks effect...and strangers wont know about the supreme vindication so it is no compensation for us.
I have one of those cameras too, is it the flip video? i really enjoy it, it is very handy.
Talk to you soon
Ava KOn Sun, Nov 15, 2009 at 12:32 PM, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:
Was actually planning on using this as a segment of what would be a ten-minute program and perhaps using it for a later show. But you're right, the quality is rather atrocious. I'll scrap this, then; we've got plenty of other segments planned anyway. Mostly we just did this on the spur of the moment because Straub really does owe the guy money, and letting him slap Straub in fronenglisht of the other Puerto Rican gangsters allowed the guy to gain much-needed status and now he doesn't even care about the money. Maybe I can do something with a portion of the footage later on, though.
In the meantime, a friend has lent me one of these awesome little cameras, about the size of a cell phone, that can record an hour of HD footage with really high quality audio to boot. Got some fairly high-concept skits written and will film soon. Probably won't use them for BushwickBK, though.
I'm going to ask Ellen Johnson of my PAC about the 30-second spot I wanted you to do and see if she can authorize the payment to you for doing that. Will get back to you on that soon.On Sun, Nov 15, 2009 at 12:17 PM, Ava K. Lamb <tooth.radish.ava.stove@gmail.com> wrote:I need it on a site where i can download the file.
this is a file sharing site
http://www.4shared.com
I know you really like this video, but i feel like i should express my concern that the quality is so bad, if it were my video ... i would scrap it and just call it a trial.
people are used to better quality than this and the sound is so bad, yes, caption can be done but...if i were you i would just do it over....I also think that if this is your first show there should be more intro. Because you get it, it may still play for you with this quality, but i think for outsiders it wont play as well. It is human to want to SEE faces and faces here are not readable. thats the major issue.
perhaps you plan on doing that .
Anyway, if you are sure you want to go with it...it would not take long and i will cut it down for you... you have to put it in file sharing.
thanks
ava k