Re: Barrett EDIT
Subject: Re: Barrett EDIT
From: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>
Date: 9/28/09, 19:29
To: Paul Caine <pcaine@theonion.com>

Sure thing, I'll get the revised version to you by tomorrow afternoon. I'll also have a couple of article ideas for you by then as well.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown
Brooklyn, NY
512-560-2302


On Mon, Sep 28, 2009 at 6:24 PM, Paul Caine <pcaine@theonion.com> wrote:
Hi Barrett,

We edited your piece and we're still hung up on the ending. Basically, as readers we need to understand what's special about Beauty Bar—and why it's different than Union Pool. Noting that people who smoke outside can talk to one another feels limp, as you can do that at any bar. I've attached an edited copy with comments from my editor. Let me know what you think. If you can make edits—essentially re-write the last graf—and return it by tomorrow afternoon, that'd be ideal. Thanks much,

Paul

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