Subject: Fwd: Offal EDIT
From: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>
Date: 7/9/09, 18:17
To: Karen Lancaster <lancaster.karen@gmail.com>

Went to the post office this afternoon but it closed while I was in line; will try in the morning, I promise. Meanwhile, scroll down and see what nice things the editors of The Onion said about my piece.

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From: Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>
Date: Thu, Jul 9, 2009 at 10:04 AM
Subject: Re: Offal EDIT
To: Paul Caine <pcaine@theonion.com>


Hi, Paul-

The edit looks fine. Let me know if I should send an invoice. Do you guys have any more ideas on the spike or do you want me to query you later on?

Thanks,

Barrett Brown
Brooklyn, NY
512-560-2302


On Wed, Jul 8, 2009 at 6:24 PM, Paul Caine <pcaine@theonion.com> wrote:
Hi Barrett,

Hope all is well. I've had my editor, Andy Battaglia, edit the piece, and here's his note, attached below with an edited version of the piece. Let me know what you think. As a side note, I should have mentioned the stricture against first-person.

Thanks much,
Paul

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This is a really fantastic piece. Thanks much for writing it for us. It's a lot of fun to read, and very useful as a guide too. I trimmed it down to 750 words so we can run it in print as well as on the website. And made a few tweaks here and there, many in the interest of trimming and a few to get around some of the first-person. We don't generally allow first-person at all, but a few of the references that way felt really right... so they can work, as long as only where it would be contorted otherwise.

Take a look and let us know if any of the changes rankle or misrepresent. It's in TRACK CHANGES, all.

And thanks again. We're excited to publish this one. Please write more!

Andy
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