| Subject: Re: Thanksgiving letter |
| From: "Barrett Brown" <barriticus@gmail.com> |
| Date: 11/1/08, 11:37 |
| To: "Adam Kruvand" <adamk@studio2a.net> |
Try this version:
Thanks for Giving Us a Chance
To most Americans, Thanksgiving entails both quiet reflection and boisterous family conversations, happy hellos and sad goodbyes, prayer and football and combinations of the two. For us, Thanksgiving means being exiled to the kids' table because we simply won't stop talking about 3d. And the kids aren't too happy with us, either.
A Cornucopia of Awkward Silences
Apparently, Grandma has just as little tolerance for twenty-minute conversations on the subject of bloom lighting as she does for lactose. And Grandpa, it seems, likes to watch the ballgame in peace without having to hear about how easily we could render a photorealistic Cotton Bowl and how competitive our prices would be if someone were to ask us to do it. As for Uncle Ted, we thought we'd peaked his interest on the subject of cloud algorithms when he started nodding, but then he fell asleep with a beer in his hand. We'll get him next time. Or maybe not.
Our Clients Love 3d. So Will Yours.
It's
their loss. 3D, after all, is just as useful as it is tasty. And
to
those companies that have given us a chance, our unique approach to
this most splendid of technologies is every bit as pleasing as
pumpkin pie, and more utilitarian to boot. Our
finished product helps to accentuate the merits of your own, making
it that much more likely that your next client presentation ends with
a green light. No pie can do that.
Relax We're On It.
Let Studio2a handle your next project, and you'll have that much more for which to be thankful when Turkey Day rolls around. Plus, you'll be able to talk to Grandma with a mind at ease. We envy you; ours appears to be screening her calls.
See changes to last pragh below.
Otherwise, I'd say it's close Maybe the last line could use some enhancement?
From: Barrett Brown [mailto:barriticus@gmail.com]
Sent: Friday, October 31, 2008 10:23 AM
To: Adam Kruvand
Subject: Re: Thanksgiving letter
Let me know if this is tweaked to your satisfaction - just made a couple of small additions/changes, but could easily tweak it more:
Thanks for Giving Us a Chance
To most Americans, Thanksgiving entails both quiet reflection and boisterous family conversations, happy hellos and sad goodbyes, prayer and football and combinations of the two. For us, Thanksgiving means being exiled to the kids' table because we simply won't stop talking about 3d. And the kids aren't too happy with us, either.
A Cornucopia of Awkward Silences
Apparently, Grandma has just as little tolerance for twenty-minute conversations on the subject of bloom lighting as she does for lactose. And Grandpa, it seems, likes to watch the ballgame in peace without having to hear about how easily we could render a photorealistic Cotton Bowl and how competitive our prices would be if someone were to ask us to do it. As for Uncle Ted, we thought we'd peaked his interest on the subject of cloud algorithms when he started nodding, but then he fell asleep with a beer in his hand. We'll get him next time. Or maybe not.
Our Clients Love 3d. So Will Yours.3d is just as useful as it is tasty. To those companies who have given us a chance, our unique approach to this most splendid of technologies is as pleasing as pumpkin pie and comparable to cranberry sauce. Our finished product will help to accentuate the merits of your own, making it that much more likely that your next client presentation ends with a green light. So when Turkey Day rolls around, you'll have one less thing to worry about and more time to talk to dear Grandma.
Relax We're On It.
Give us a call today, and you'll give thanks tomorrow.
On Thu, Oct 30, 2008 at 12:20 PM, Adam Kruvand <adamk@studio2a.net> wrote:
How about both?
"YOU spend more time talking to Grandma, cause we're on it."
AF says stay away from the "we are working on thanksgiving". But I like the "relaxed clients" cause we're on it. Maybe so much that one of the title could be "Relax, We're on it."
From: Barrett Brown [mailto:barriticus@gmail.com]
Sent: Thursday, October 30, 2008 11:02 AM
To: Adam Kruvand
Subject: Re: Thanksgiving letter
I've had too much. So do you want me to keep the whole grandma not getting 3d thing and just incorporate the "you can spend your holiday more relaxed because we're on it, etc." into the 3rd paragraph?
On Thu, Oct 30, 2008 at 11:20 AM, Adam Kruvand <adamk@studio2a.net> wrote:
Sorry = it was early, and I didn't have enough coffee .
To most Americans, Thanksgiving entails both quiet reflection and boisterous family conversations, happy hellos and sad goodbyes, prayer and football and combinations of the two. For us, Thanksgiving means
being exiled to the kids' table because we simply won't stop talking about 3d. And the kids aren't too happy with us, either ..From: Barrett Brown [mailto:barriticus@gmail.com]
Sent: Thursday, October 30, 2008 10:03 AM
To: Adam Kruvand
Subject: Re: Thanksgiving letter
You mean you want to change the theme of the first paragraph to something like "Thanksgiving means blah blah blah for most people but an extra day to work without phone interruptions" and then tweak the rest to reflect that theme, right?
On Thu, Oct 30, 2008 at 10:11 AM, Adam Kruvand <adamk@studio2a.net> wrote:
Or does it mean "an extra day to work without phone call interruptions" (cause we work all the time that is one of our themes). And then maybe that could turn into how we create more time for our clients to celebrate later in pargh #3? Or how they are less stressed cause they don't have to worry about images for their presentation.
I like the rest. I'll run it past AdamF when he gets in. Anything you want to change?
?
ak
visualize!
From: Barrett Brown [mailto:barriticus@gmail.com]
Sent: Thursday, October 30, 2008 8:09 AM
To: Adam Kruvand
Subject: Thanksgiving letter
Here's a rough draft for that. Let me know what you think.
Thanks for Giving Us a Chance
To most Americans, Thanksgiving entails both quiet reflection and boisterous family conversations, happy hellos and sad goodbyes, prayer and football and combinations of the two. For us, Thanksgiving means being exiled to the kids' table because we simply won't stop talking about 3d. And the kids aren't too happy with us, either.
A Cornucopia of Awkward Silences
Apparently, Grandma has just as little tolerance for twenty-minute conversations on the subject of bloom lighting as she does for lactose. And Grandpa, it seems, likes to watch the ballgame in peace without having to hear about how easily we could render a photorealistic Cotton Bowl and how competitive our prices would be if someone were to ask us to do it. As for Uncle Cid, we thought we'd peaked his interest on the subject of cloud algorithms when he started nodding, but then he fell asleep with a beer in his hand. We'll get him next time. Or maybe not.
Well, Our Clients Love 3d. And So Will Yours.
So Thanksgiving isn't really our scene, and talk of 3d doesn't quite get the part going among the folks back home. But to those companies who have given us a chance, our unique approach to this most splendid of technologies is as pleasing as pumpkin pie and comparable to cranberry sauce.3d is just as useful as it is tasty. For starters, it can help you to communicate your concepts to clients through pictures of the sort that are worth well over a thousand words. Ultimately, this can help to eliminate change orders, lost time, wasted resources, and other, similarly unsavory things that tend to result from communicational friction. More importantly, our finished product will help to accentuate the merits of your own, making it that much more likely that your next client presentation ends with a green light.
Problems? Solved.
Grandma doesn't quite get 3d. Do you?
Give us a call today. We'll be in the office, eating leftovers.