Re: Experienced Humor Writer

Hi, Sati-

Actually, I've still got to finish up a few things today but will have
a script for you tomorrow.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 27, 2008 at 10:33 AM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:


Thank you Barrett. Wonderful. I look forward tohearing from you.


Best regards,



Sati


On 8/27/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Okay, this shouldn't be a problem at all. I have to finish something
up this morning, but will get back to you with a short script later
after lunch.

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 27, 2008 at 8:35 AM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:


Thank you Barrett. That will be great.


Best regards,



Sati


On 8/27/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Hi, Sati-

Sure, I'll take a look at this and give it some thought and will get
back to you a bit later in the day.

Regards,

Barrett Brown

On Wed, Aug 27, 2008 at 8:31 AM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Dear Barrett,



Hello, how are you? Good Morning.



A few days ago, as I was going for a walk, I got an idea regarding
the
script on celebrities and animated images.



Is it possible that you can conceive some humorous  idea on some
current
topic  (which has a shelf value of at least 1 or 2 years say, oil
price,
inflation, immigration etc), and how those past presidents,
entertainment
celebrities, and other celebrities would react/comment on them. May
be
it
can be on two topics, one for presidents and politicians and the
other
topic
for entertainment celebrities.



I have already done the CD of the commentary done by a voice over
specialist
in New Jersey. Actual voices of personalities (eg. Kennedy's "Don't
ask
what
the country can do for you etc, and Regan's "Mr. Gorbachev, tear down
this
Wall etc.), and animal voices are also integrated into the
commentary.



In the new story/script  that I proposing now, I would like to add
actual
voices of  Kennedy, Reagan et all.  I think by visiting YouTube you
may
get
some relevant quotes which could be incorporated into the story. I
think
that will be a great hit!

On the other hand, if this task will mean lot of work/trouble for
you,
as
there are too many personalities in my repertoire, it may be
difficult
to
come up with jokes for each one of them. In that case, for the time
being I
will continue to use my current script and original quotes from
Kennedy,
Reagan etc.

Kindly let me know your views on this suggestion.



My current script is attached for your review.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/21/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati-

Sorry to hear that; I didn't realize that the script was so
action-packed.
Good luck with everything, and let me know if you would like to
discuss
future projects.

Regards,

Barrett Brown

On Thu, Aug 21, 2008 at 6:21 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:





Dear Barrett,



Hello. Between the 2 short-listed scripts that  I had sent to my
agent,
he preferred to choose the other one. He liked your concept and
story
but he
thinks that it may be difficult to translate the story into action
with only
2 hands. On the other hand, the one he prefers is a simple,
straight
forward
animal farm story, which will be easier to perform.



I am sorry to give you this bad news. Honestly, I was very much
excited
about your novel concept. May be I will get back to you in due
course
to
experiment with your full story as well. Also, I have an idea to
revamp my
script on celebrities and animated images, for which I may seek
your
services.



Thank you once again for your input and ideas.



Best regards,



Sati




On 8/21/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Hi, Sati-

Ha, very nice. Are you still in the running for that competition?
We'll
need to write you some humorous responses for some of the more
typical
questions you get from TV hosts and that sort of thing.

I'm located in Brooklyn, just ten minutes east of lower Manhattan.
Checked out your page this morning; I see you hold one of those
World
Bank
jobs of the sort for one often sees classified ads in The
Economist.
You
must be a busy guy.

A bit more about me in case your agent needs to know - my first
book,
Flock of Dodos: Behind Modern Creationism, Intelligent Design, and
the
Easter Bunny, was released last year to praise from Alan
Dershowitz,
Rolling
Stone, Air America Radio, Skeptic, and other sources, and my work
has
appeared in dozens of humor publications, public policy journals,
trade
pubs, and regional magazines, among other things. I also serve as
senior
copywriter for a production company called Texodus Media based
here
in
Brooklyn, serve as communications director for a PAC based in New
Jersey,
and do a few other odds and ends elsewhere.

Talk to you soon,

Barrett

On Thu, Aug 21, 2008 at 6:54 AM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Good Morning Barrett.



From the following link, you can watch my hand shadows act, which
was
aired recently in NBC's America's Got Talent program.



http://www.AsianOcean.com/agt



Alternatively, you can also see it at:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Dbvwr1Oxhus



Best regards,



Sati

PS: Where are you located?






On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sounds good. Of course, the final script would be much better.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 9:59 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Thank you Barrett for your sample script.  That's brilliant,
and I
really liked it.



Let me send it to my talent agent and see what he has to say. I
shall
get back to you tomorrow.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati-

Actually, never mind about the voices. Here is my sample:

Aristotle said that man is a political animal. But about the
animals
themselves? They are, of course, even more political, which is
to
say, even
more insufferable.

And here we have a local neighborhood association meeting
somewhere
in the Animal Kingdom, which is, incidentally, a
constitutional
monarchy.
The provinces have quite a bit of discretion.

Here we have the Hen, who presides over the meeting by virtue
of
her
sheer loudness. The Hen announces that the neighborhood has a
budget surplus
this year. So, how shall they spend it?

The rabbit stands up to speak. He believes the surplus ought
to
be
spent on little pieces of corn and melon and perhaps a sign
forbidding
children from picking up rabbits and carrying them around in
an
uncomfortable fashion.

The tiger stands up next. He proposes that the surplus be
spent
on
rabbit traps.

The cobra stands up  well, rather slithers up. He says that
the
surplus ought to be spent on public transportation for cobras.
He
also
seconds the motion regarding rabbit traps.

The rabbit stands up. Then he runs off.

The giraffe stands up over everyone else. He gets plenty of
respect
for this, incidentally. The other animals are impressed by
tallness. This is
what the pollsters have been telling him, anyway. Otherwise,
he
would be
short. At any rate, the giraffe proposes that the meeting be
adjourned and
that cobra and tiger both be investigated for taking illegal
campaign
contributions immediately.

The duck seconds the motion.

The hen rules it into law.

The cobra and the tiger run off to some foreign country with
which
the Animal Kingdom has a non-extradition treaty.

See, democracy works!

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:35 PM, Barrett Brown
<barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati, will have this sample to you in a bit, but need to know
if
you can do voices - not imitations, but can you do different
voices for
different animals?

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:11 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Thank you Barrett.



I look forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Okay, I will go ahead and think up five or six more lines
for
your consideration this evening (these would not actually
be
in the final
script, as I still need to think up a good plot). Don't
worry
about the
constraints of shadow puppets; most of this will be
dialogue
and simple
movement, but of course I will leave the latter in your
hands,
pun sort of
intended.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:05 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:




Thank you Barrett for your clarification. I totally agree
with
your line of thinking, and I am excited about this
humorous
concept. So
kindly go ahead and please come up with some more lines.



So far I have received about 30 responses, and already 6-7
persons have sent me their samples. But honestly, I am
most
impressed with
your story line. In fact, this is the type of story that I
had in mind and
was looking for. But the only thing is that after you have
done the story, I
should be in a position to translate them into action with
my
hands!



I look forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Regarding the election, I agree with you, and didn't mean
to
convey that it would be based on this particular
election;
it would be, as
you say, akin to Animal Farm insomuch as that it would be
a
humorous
metaphor about politics and social interaction in general
(but unlike Animal
Farm insomuch as that no animal will represent any
particular person, and
particularly not Trotsky and Stalin!). So it would be
something you would be
able to use beyond November. If you still want to go with
that idea, I would
like to do it, and will provide you with some more
samples
based on that
theme a bit later this evening. Let me know what you
think.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 7:46 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:





Thank you Barrett for your sample lines. Your idea of
holding
an election is great, and  I think you are on the right
track. But at the
same time, as I am preparing the act for a longer time
(beyond November), it
will be better to avoid the presidential election  which
is
in Nov. But we
can put it as a local election or an election in the
animal
kingdom,
something similar to George Orwell's Animal Farm. If you
can kindly come up
with another 3-4 lines for other animals, that will be
great.



Thank you once again for your input and ideas.



Best regards,



Sati






On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Hi, Sati-

For the general storyline, I would have the animals
holding
an election. This would be very well-received for the
next
few months, what
with our own upcoming election. Also, Americans love
political humor in
general. Now, for some sample rewrites:

"In Hinduism, the cow is a symbol of wealth, strength,
abundance, selfless giving and a full Earthly life.
Think
of the cow as the
Barack Obama of the animal kingdom."

"Miss Kitty Cat has just arrived back from England. How
are
you, Miss Kitty Cat? Oh, she is limping. She was caught
up
in a football
riot. I told you, Miss Kitty Cat, it is best to stick
to
Big Ben."

Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown



On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:10 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:



Thank you Barrett for your positive response.  I look
forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>
wrote:


Sure, Sati. I'll take a look at this and get back to
you
later this evening.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:07 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:





Hello. Thank you Barrett for your prompt response. I
am
attaching my current script. I am looking for a
thorough overhauling of the
script with a humorous spin on it, or a totally new
story line/approach.



My target audience are adults, and I will be
performing
for corporate clients. The major part of my act will
be
showing images of
celebrities and other personalities.



If you can kindly let me know your story line about
the
animals, and write one or two sentences on any  5 or
6
images out of 22,
that will be great. That will help me to take a
decision.



Considering that the script is a brief one lasting
5-6
minutes, my budget is only $100.



Kindly let me know in case you will be interested.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com>
wrote:


Howdy-

I'd like to be considered for your project. I write
for
National Lampoon and other outlets, and have
otherwise
worked in humor on
and off for most of my life. I've done a little
script
writing, too. If
you'd like to talk, let me know.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown
512-560-2302