Re: Experienced Humor Writer

Hi, Sati-

Sure, I'll take a look at this and give it some thought and will get
back to you a bit later in the day.

Regards,

Barrett Brown

On Wed, Aug 27, 2008 at 8:31 AM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:




Dear Barrett,



Hello, how are you? Good Morning.



A few days ago, as I was going for a walk, I got an idea regarding the
script on celebrities and animated images.



Is it possible that you can conceive some humorous  idea on some current
topic  (which has a shelf value of at least 1 or 2 years say, oil price,
inflation, immigration etc), and how those past presidents, entertainment
celebrities, and other celebrities would react/comment on them. May be it
can be on two topics, one for presidents and politicians and the other topic
for entertainment celebrities.



I have already done the CD of the commentary done by a voice over specialist
in New Jersey. Actual voices of personalities (eg. Kennedy's "Don't ask what
the country can do for you etc, and Regan's "Mr. Gorbachev, tear down this
Wall etc.), and animal voices are also integrated into the commentary.



In the new story/script  that I proposing now, I would like to add actual
voices of  Kennedy, Reagan et all.  I think by visiting YouTube you may get
some relevant quotes which could be incorporated into the story. I think
that will be a great hit!

On the other hand, if this task will mean lot of work/trouble for you, as
there are too many personalities in my repertoire, it may be difficult to
come up with jokes for each one of them. In that case, for the time being I
will continue to use my current script and original quotes from Kennedy,
Reagan etc.

Kindly let me know your views on this suggestion.



My current script is attached for your review.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/21/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati-

Sorry to hear that; I didn't realize that the script was so action-packed.
Good luck with everything, and let me know if you would like to discuss
future projects.

Regards,

Barrett Brown

On Thu, Aug 21, 2008 at 6:21 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:





Dear Barrett,



Hello. Between the 2 short-listed scripts that  I had sent to my agent,
he preferred to choose the other one. He liked your concept and story but he
thinks that it may be difficult to translate the story into action with only
2 hands. On the other hand, the one he prefers is a simple, straight forward
animal farm story, which will be easier to perform.



I am sorry to give you this bad news. Honestly, I was very much excited
about your novel concept. May be I will get back to you in due course to
experiment with your full story as well. Also, I have an idea to revamp my
script on celebrities and animated images, for which I may seek your
services.



Thank you once again for your input and ideas.



Best regards,



Sati




On 8/21/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Hi, Sati-

Ha, very nice. Are you still in the running for that competition? We'll
need to write you some humorous responses for some of the more typical
questions you get from TV hosts and that sort of thing.

I'm located in Brooklyn, just ten minutes east of lower Manhattan.
Checked out your page this morning; I see you hold one of those World Bank
jobs of the sort for one often sees classified ads in The Economist. You
must be a busy guy.

A bit more about me in case your agent needs to know - my first book,
Flock of Dodos: Behind Modern Creationism, Intelligent Design, and the
Easter Bunny, was released last year to praise from Alan Dershowitz, Rolling
Stone, Air America Radio, Skeptic, and other sources, and my work has
appeared in dozens of humor publications, public policy journals, trade
pubs, and regional magazines, among other things. I also serve as senior
copywriter for a production company called Texodus Media based here in
Brooklyn, serve as communications director for a PAC based in New Jersey,
and do a few other odds and ends elsewhere.

Talk to you soon,

Barrett

On Thu, Aug 21, 2008 at 6:54 AM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Good Morning Barrett.



From the following link, you can watch my hand shadows act, which was
aired recently in NBC's America's Got Talent program.



http://www.AsianOcean.com/agt



Alternatively, you can also see it at:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Dbvwr1Oxhus



Best regards,



Sati

PS: Where are you located?






On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sounds good. Of course, the final script would be much better.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 9:59 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Thank you Barrett for your sample script.  That's brilliant, and I
really liked it.



Let me send it to my talent agent and see what he has to say. I shall
get back to you tomorrow.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati-

Actually, never mind about the voices. Here is my sample:

Aristotle said that man is a political animal. But about the animals
themselves? They are, of course, even more political, which is to say, even
more insufferable.

And here we have a local neighborhood association meeting somewhere
in the Animal Kingdom, which is, incidentally, a constitutional monarchy.
The provinces have quite a bit of discretion.

Here we have the Hen, who presides over the meeting by virtue of her
sheer loudness. The Hen announces that the neighborhood has a budget surplus
this year. So, how shall they spend it?

The rabbit stands up to speak. He believes the surplus ought to be
spent on little pieces of corn and melon and perhaps a sign forbidding
children from picking up rabbits and carrying them around in an
uncomfortable fashion.

The tiger stands up next. He proposes that the surplus be spent on
rabbit traps.

The cobra stands up  well, rather slithers up. He says that the
surplus ought to be spent on public transportation for cobras. He also
seconds the motion regarding rabbit traps.

The rabbit stands up. Then he runs off.

The giraffe stands up over everyone else. He gets plenty of respect
for this, incidentally. The other animals are impressed by tallness. This is
what the pollsters have been telling him, anyway. Otherwise, he would be
short. At any rate, the giraffe proposes that the meeting be adjourned and
that cobra and tiger both be investigated for taking illegal campaign
contributions immediately.

The duck seconds the motion.

The hen rules it into law.

The cobra and the tiger run off to some foreign country with which
the Animal Kingdom has a non-extradition treaty.

See, democracy works!

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:35 PM, Barrett Brown
<barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sati, will have this sample to you in a bit, but need to know if
you can do voices - not imitations, but can you do different voices for
different animals?

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:11 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com>
wrote:




Thank you Barrett.



I look forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Okay, I will go ahead and think up five or six more lines for
your consideration this evening (these would not actually be in the final
script, as I still need to think up a good plot). Don't worry about the
constraints of shadow puppets; most of this will be dialogue and simple
movement, but of course I will leave the latter in your hands, pun sort of
intended.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 8:05 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:




Thank you Barrett for your clarification. I totally agree with
your line of thinking, and I am excited about this humorous concept. So
kindly go ahead and please come up with some more lines.



So far I have received about 30 responses, and already 6-7
persons have sent me their samples. But honestly, I am most impressed with
your story line. In fact, this is the type of story that I had in mind and
was looking for. But the only thing is that after you have done the story, I
should be in a position to translate them into action with my hands!



I look forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Regarding the election, I agree with you, and didn't mean to
convey that it would be based on this particular election; it would be, as
you say, akin to Animal Farm insomuch as that it would be a humorous
metaphor about politics and social interaction in general (but unlike Animal
Farm insomuch as that no animal will represent any particular person, and
particularly not Trotsky and Stalin!). So it would be something you would be
able to use beyond November. If you still want to go with that idea, I would
like to do it, and will provide you with some more samples based on that
theme a bit later this evening. Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 7:46 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:





Thank you Barrett for your sample lines. Your idea of holding
an election is great, and  I think you are on the right track. But at the
same time, as I am preparing the act for a longer time (beyond November), it
will be better to avoid the presidential election  which is in Nov. But we
can put it as a local election or an election in the animal kingdom,
something similar to George Orwell's Animal Farm. If you can kindly come up
with another 3-4 lines for other animals, that will be great.



Thank you once again for your input and ideas.



Best regards,



Sati






On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Hi, Sati-

For the general storyline, I would have the animals holding
an election. This would be very well-received for the next few months, what
with our own upcoming election. Also, Americans love political humor in
general. Now, for some sample rewrites:

"In Hinduism, the cow is a symbol of wealth, strength,
abundance, selfless giving and a full Earthly life. Think of the cow as the
Barack Obama of the animal kingdom."

"Miss Kitty Cat has just arrived back from England. How are
you, Miss Kitty Cat? Oh, she is limping. She was caught up in a football
riot. I told you, Miss Kitty Cat, it is best to stick to Big Ben."

Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown



On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:10 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:



Thank you Barrett for your positive response.  I look
forward to hearing from you.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Sure, Sati. I'll take a look at this and get back to you
later this evening.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:07 PM, Sati Achath
<satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:





Hello. Thank you Barrett for your prompt response. I am
attaching my current script. I am looking for a thorough overhauling of the
script with a humorous spin on it, or a totally new story line/approach.



My target audience are adults, and I will be performing
for corporate clients. The major part of my act will be showing images of
celebrities and other personalities.



If you can kindly let me know your story line about the
animals, and write one or two sentences on any  5 or 6 images out of 22,
that will be great. That will help me to take a decision.



Considering that the script is a brief one lasting 5-6
minutes, my budget is only $100.



Kindly let me know in case you will be interested.



Best regards,



Sati


On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:


Howdy-

I'd like to be considered for your project. I write for
National Lampoon and other outlets, and have otherwise worked in humor on
and off for most of my life. I've done a little script writing, too. If
you'd like to talk, let me know.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown
512-560-2302