Thank you Barrett for your clarification. I totally agree with your line of thinking, and I am excited about this humorous concept. So kindly go ahead and please come up with some more lines.

So far I have received about 30 responses, and already 6-7  persons have sent me their samples. But honestly, I am most impressed with your story line. In fact, this is the type of story that I had in mind and was looking for. But the only thing is that after you have done the story, I should be in a position to translate them into action with my hands!

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

Sati

Regarding the election, I agree with you, and didn't mean to convey that it would be based on this particular election; it would be, as you say, akin to Animal Farm insomuch as that it would be a humorous metaphor about politics and social interaction in general (but unlike Animal Farm insomuch as that no animal will represent any particular person, and particularly not Trotsky and Stalin!). So it would be something you would be able to use beyond November. If you still want to go with that idea, I would like to do it, and will provide you with some more samples based on that theme a bit later this evening. Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 7:46 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:

 

 

Thank you Barrett for your sample lines. Your idea of holding an election is great, and  I think you are on the right track. But at the same time, as I am preparing the act for a longer time (beyond November), it will be better to avoid the presidential election  which is in Nov. But we can put it as a local election or an election in the animal kingdom, something similar to George Orwell's Animal Farm. If you can kindly come up with another 3-4 lines for other animals, that will be great.

  

Thank you once again for your input and ideas.

 

Best regards,

 

Sati

 

 

 

On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:

Hi, Sati-

For the general storyline, I would have the animals holding an election. This would be very well-received for the next few months, what with our own upcoming election. Also, Americans love political humor in general. Now, for some sample rewrites:

"In Hinduism, the cow is a symbol of wealth, strength, abundance, selfless giving and a full Earthly life. Think of the cow as the Barack Obama of the animal kingdom."

"Miss Kitty Cat has just arrived back from England. How are you, Miss Kitty Cat? Oh, she is limping. She was caught up in a football riot. I told you, Miss Kitty Cat, it is best to stick to Big Ben."

Let me know what you think.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:10 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:

 

Thank you Barrett for your positive response.  I look forward to hearing from you.

 

Best regards,

 

Sati

 

On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:

Sure, Sati. I'll take a look at this and get back to you later this evening.

Thanks,

Barrett

On Wed, Aug 20, 2008 at 6:07 PM, Sati Achath <satiachath@gmail.com> wrote:

 

 

Hello. Thank you Barrett for your prompt response. I am attaching my current script. I am looking for a thorough overhauling of the script with a humorous spin on it, or a totally new story line/approach.

 

My target audience are adults, and I will be performing for corporate clients. The major part of my act will be showing images of celebrities and other personalities.

 

If you can kindly let me know your story line about the animals, and write one or two sentences on any  5 or 6 images out of 22, that will be great. That will help me to take a decision.

 

Considering that the script is a brief one lasting 5-6 minutes, my budget is only $100.

 

Kindly let me know in case you will be interested.

 

Best regards,

 

Sati

 

On 8/20/08, Barrett Brown <barriticus@gmail.com> wrote:

Howdy-

I'd like to be considered for your project. I write for National Lampoon and other outlets, and have otherwise worked in humor on and off for most of my life. I've done a little script writing, too. If you'd like to talk, let me know.

Thanks,

Barrett Brown
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